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There were various bits I had come up with to put in that story that ultimately didn't fit.  Aside from the length I was pushing, they seemed kind of gratuitous and distracted from the main plot, but I thought a few readers might find them interesting.

For example, what happened to the Bravo team in the North Tunnel?

The North Tunnel does need some love, maybe someday.  The basic idea is that Dr. Mauser built a "Honey Pot" to distract would-be spies and infiltrators.  Most Evil Lairs have escape systems, and a great way to sneak in is through the out door.  So if you're trying to find a way in and you're coming at the compound along a Forest Service road on the north side, you might find a small shack/garage.  Inside is a small Land Rover truck under a tarp, and some suspiciously easy to move crates that cover up the entrance to an underground tunnel.  "Aha!" our intrepid young adventurer thinks, "This must be his secret escape tunnel!  I must explore this!" and it's the last he's ever heard from again.

There were a few trap ideas.  One that didn't fit in the escape tunnel theme (would have been better for an entrance tunnel under the parking lot to keep employees out of the rain when they come in by Bus.) is based on what we have at work, those sort of cage-like turnstiles.  There would be beacon lights and illuminated signs saying "Evacuate" and "Unlocked" that would encourage the troops to try to go through.  And if they turned the cage by hand, it would turn freely.  But the first man to actually enter the turnstile would find out that the circular cage around the outside would rotate too, cutting off the exit, AND the turnstile would NOT turn back.  Inevitably, the rotating bars would trap him against the fixed bars like an egg slicer, and his comrades would be forced to attempt to rescue him while he was getting crushed, or leave him to die (or mercy kill him).  That's a guaranteed Morale crusher.

There would be some more conventional traps, like sentry guns and such that they can get overconfident by defeating, but at some point they would encounter the trap floor that got mentioned way back in "Chastising Zero".  The only thing is, unbeknownst to Phantom, Mauser has hacked the Latex nanobots.  Instead of merely encasing the victims, they are enveloped without life support, which is the least of their worries as they are programmed to contract into the smallest volume possible, crushing bones and organs as the goo shrinks to an easily cleaned up and rolled away sphere.

Pretty gruesome.

Then there's the liquid-filled pit trap.  I say liquid because it's not water.  You can float in water.  But a pit filled with say, gasoline, which has a lower density than water - you simply sink to the bottom.  It is impossible to swim in it.  It's a particularly nasty way to go.  Man, the things I remember from high-school Physics.

In general, one of Mauser Enterprises side businesses is building traps and capture devices to sell to other Mads.  Hence the plethora of BDSM equipment also available at the plant.  The Fabrication division is a wonderland all to itself.  The North Tunnel is sort of an open testing facility.  And if anyone ever got to the end of it, they'd just find a concrete wall with stolen "No Outlet" and "Dead End" signs mounted on it, and a note saying "Good luck getting back out."

Oh, and the Land Rover is booby-trapped too, so that if they try to install a car bomb on it, they'll set off the one that's already installed.

I was also considering a thread where the battle was being covered by the local news, and Sunni Meadows from "Chat Show" took a stray bullet and was killed live on TV.  She lucked out this time.  Maybe she'll get that interview after all!

Also, the bit with Emma and the note ended up moving all over the place.  Originally it was in the same section as the failed strafing run, but I kinda wanted it at the end, so I had to break it in half.  And then the whole thing with the UPS truck came up, and I realized it couldn't be at the end either, but it made a nice little cutaway between two scenes at the compound.

And hey, it looks like 46 reads in the first 24 hours!  Not bad!  (I noticed that Chat Show, of all things, has picked up a bunch of reads today too.  Odd.)

And 24 hours later, the first typo spotted and fixed.  Then becomes than.  Time to re-save it....
Eh, and another, missed Italics on the Washington once.
RabidGundam caught a good one.
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Gruesome shmuesome, that's what smart villains do. Any act of mercy will only be repaid by the heroes getting the upper hand and your reputation tarnished because the hero "sees the good in you" and makes you contemplate just before you hit the red Doomsday Machine button

Go all the way, with no regrets
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